Sleepless Revision Group 3

Chapters 7, 8, and 9

Intro —

As mentioned previously, in the effort to be very transparent about the writing process, I’ve opted to include you all in the revision process as I go back through Sleepless and try to alter the first draft into something that I feel better conveys the narrative I wanted to explore.

These revision reviews WILL contain spoilers for the whole of Sleepless, as I’ll often take the opportunity to walk through why a choice or change was made and how I think it will serve the story better. You have been warned.

Without further ado, let’s get into my thoughts and changes for Sleepless’s first revision pass on these next few chapters.

I’ve opted to revise 7-9 instead of 8-11 as originally planned in my Revision Prepper. With saving chapter seven for this group from the last revision set, it just made more sense to tackle the Sunlight incident and Lionel’s disappearance as separate issues and address them as a whole after the next revision set has been completed.