Sleepless Revision Group 6

CH 16-18

Intro —

As mentioned previously, in the effort to be very transparent about the writing process, I’ve opted to include you all in the revision process as I go back through Sleepless and try to alter the first draft into something that I feel better conveys the narrative I wanted to explore.

These revision reviews WILL contain spoilers for the whole of Sleepless, as I’ll often take the opportunity to walk through why a choice or change was made and how I think it will serve the story better. You have been warned.

Without further ado, let’s get into my thoughts and changes for Sleepless’s first revision pass on these next few chapters.

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Overview

Chapter Sixteen — covers the preamble to Margo’s entrance into the Dream, and Felix’s exit onto the mainland.

Chapter Seventeen— Covers Margo’s entrance into the Dream, and her time at the castle.

Chapter Eighteen — Covers further interactions between Margo and the Parhelions back at the citadel, then the interactions at Val’s cabin.

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In its own way, editing is a little like getting tangles out of your hair. If you have long hair, you might be able to sympathize with this one — sometimes I’ll wake up with horrible tangles in my hair, and brushing them out becomes a drawn out process of sectioning off bits of hair and brushing them out one by one. Some sections will brush out nice and easy but invariably there’s one section that’s THE Tangle, and refuses to come out easily.

As we get further and further along in this editing process, I’m getting closer and closer to my known Tangle area with this story — the ending. There’s a good chance that when we get there, we’ll be doing a full overhaul of the written story.

For now, though, we’ll focus on chapters sixteen, seventeen, and eighteen — which are actually, rather delightfully, less tangled than I was worried they would be.